Wednesday, September 1, 2010
Survival Stories
What really made an impact me was all of the survival stories on how only some people survived and how so much people died, especially the ones that were little kids. I didn't really know much about the holocaust because it never really interested me. After actually reading about it, it really made me think on how people's life was back then, how they were all treated, how their living conditions were, and how rough they all had it. A difficult time in my life was when I first found out I was pregnant. I was just thinking "how am I going to do it without having an education, without having a job or any money. How is this going to impact on my family." But then I realized that I'm strong, and I can do it. Turned out my family wanted to help me out. I don't think that this can relate to the holocaust, because any difficult situation The Jews had, they didn't really have a family to rely on.Tthey had to pretty much rely on themselves. Then again I think it does relate to the holocaust, because some people knew how hard they had it, how hard things were, and what they were going through. They stayed strong and some people survived through it. Basically what I think of a survivor is someone who had it rough in their life and made it through all of it thick and thin.
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ReplyDeleteVery nice job thinking about your personal experience Katie. This is such an exciting time in your life and I am so glad that I get to be a part of it and have you in my class. Keep pushing yourself to be the very best--you can do it!
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Be sure to give each blog post a unique title. This will help your reader to know what topic you are writing about from the very start.
Sentence fragment: "On how some people survived and how some people died, especially the ones that were little kids."
Sentence fragment and subject-verb agreement: "On how people's life was back then, how they were all treated, how their living conditions were, and how rough they all had it."
Run-ons: "I don't think that this can relate to the holocaust because any difficault situation they had, they didn't really have a family to rely on, they had to pretty much rely on themselves. But then again I think it does relate to the holocaust because some people knew how hard they had it, how hard things was and what they were going through, and yet they stayed strong and some people survived through it because they were strong."
Subject-verb agreement: "how hard things was"
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10/10: Awesome job revising!
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