"The idea was to write about everything that had happened to him-all that had led him to a Himmel Street basement-but it was not what came out. Max's exile produced something else entirely. It was a collection of random thoughts and he chose to embrace them. They felt
true"(Zusak 277). In Max's life story, he writes about Hitler and what the role of Hitler is. In the first picture Max draws, it is picture of the Germans praising Hitler. In the second picture he draws, it is a picture of a man and a girl standing on top of a bunch of dead people. The significance of the pictures are that all Germans are for what Hitler does including killing Jews. I think Liesel gets frightened because she doesn't know that Hitler kills Jews until she sees the picture that Max draws. "Frightened by what she saw, Liesel placed the book back down, exactly as she found it, against Max's leg"(Zusak 281).
My Life Story.
For two whole years I've been wanting this more than anything; to be a mom. I've tried and tried and never succeeded. Then a miracle happened. Two years went by and at the age of 16 it happened. I looked down and the test said positive. I was jumping for joy. That wasn't the only exciting thing that happened. A couple months later the nurse told me, "congratulations, you're having a baby boy!" I was the happiest girl on earth.
Work Cited:
Zusak, Markus. The Book Thief. NY: Alfred A. Knopf, 2005. Print.
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ReplyDeleteNice start on this on Katie--just a couple of things to revise:)
avoid unnecessary repetition: "In the first picture Max draws, it is picture of the Germans praising Hitler."
be more specific: "For two whole years since I was 14 I've been wanting this more than anything." Make sure that the reader knows that what you've been wanting is to be a mom.
verb tense: "A couple months later the nurse tells me, "congratulations, you're having a baby boy!"
redundancy: "most happiest"
10/10: Great job revising Katie:)
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